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Post by Zesha on Apr 17, 2015 0:47:02 GMT
Name: Desired Name: Age: Gender: Birth Moon: Allegiance: Rank: [/i][/ul] Apperance: Personality: History:Social:[/i] Unnamed Stray Father: Unnamed Stray Sibling(s): Unknown Mate(s): Rex [former] Kit(s): Flame, Fox [deceased] Acquaintances: [/ul]
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Post by Danielle on Apr 17, 2015 23:53:15 GMT
Looks good! The moon is just a bit off, it should be the Cold Moon 2010 based on her age.
On the topic of age, 52 moons would be quite old for a feral cat, though still believable. Within the Clans, cats would generally join the elders around 55-65 moons, though of course there would be some variation. This isn't a request for change, but if you plan on having her be very strong or powerful for a long time you might want to lower her age a bit. Otherwise you can just leave it as is. ^^ It could be interesting to have an older cat trying to rule a Clan, too.
One last thing, mainly for clarification on my part. You said that she met Rex when she was 15 moons old, and they mated resulting in Flame and Fox. Did you mean they mated very soon after that or was it some time later? Currently Flame is 28 moons old, which means based on Red's age now she would have been around 24 moons old when her kits were born, and around 22 moons when they mated. I just want to make sure all the timelines match up.
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Post by Zesha on Apr 18, 2015 0:52:09 GMT
I'm still quite bad with the timeline part. I wanted her to be about a year older than Flame, but I wasn't sure if that would have been too young for all the things I wrote to have happened to her.
Okay. At 40 moons, Red would be a year older than Flame. She would have had to be 10 moons old when she mated with Rex, then, correct? But I worried that if she left at 9 moons, that would seem to short of a time for everything that happened in her life. (Now it seems like a really long time.)
Hm... I think I'll change her age. Maybe she can meet Rex at 9 and a half moons. If any of this sounds fallible, just let me know and I'll just keep it like it is now.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 18, 2015 1:30:57 GMT
9 moons is probably plenty of time for her life events to take place, so that could definitely work if you wanted to. ^^
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Post by Zesha on Apr 18, 2015 2:11:44 GMT
Alright, I think I've got everything updated.
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Post by Danielle on Apr 18, 2015 2:48:14 GMT
Almost got the moon right! Just one moon off this time. Should be the Cold Moon 2011 if my calculations are correct. All the rest is good! Once you change that, she'll be ready for approval.
EDIT: And approved! You can go ahead and start posting with her whenever you like ^^
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