Fluffy

[Ruby]

Name: Fluffy
Desired Name: ------
Age: 10 moons
Rank: N/A
Allegiance: Kittypet
Birth Moon: Hunter's Moon 2015
Gender: Queen
Breed: Ragdoll

Appearance: Fluffy is a small light gray and white she-cat with darker ashy flecks. A solid gray tail and ears. She has seafoam green eyes

Her pelt is an unusual downy fell with longer guard hairs that feather out and create a wispy and glowing look to her.Her eyes are a seafoam green and pale gray. She has a lighter color muzzle and underbelly. She has a darker gray mask, this color extending to her ears and her tail. Fluffy has a gentle nature and a warm atmosphere that is soothing to most cats. An easy trait to come by when you were raised carefree like a kittypet. Her voice is soft and almost a whisper at times.

Personality: Fluffy is a shy and timid she-cat who would much rather spend her time exploring the forest in solitude then spending time with her two legs or other cats. She is warm at heart and only want the best for herself and other cats. Even as a kit her siblings would play-fight and Fluffy would be off somewhere grooming herself or exploring the world around her. She loves helping out other cats with problems and although young, a quick learner and eager to try new things. She fears rejection from other cats, which is probably why she avoids them. She has a strong heart and there are high hopes for her future.

History: With Kittypet parents she was adopted out and raised like any other two leg pet. Unlike her pampered siblings though Fluffy is kept awake at night with wild cats running through her dreams, who's starry images and ancient scent enchant her and drive her to explore the woods behind her twoleg nest.

Fluffy has heard the stories of wild cats that live around the lake and sharpen their claws on old bones. She doesn't believe a word of it though, no cat could truly be that savage? The pull she feels for the forest is strong, and she can't help but venture forth into a world beyond her own.

Currently:
Fluffy ventures into the woods to answer the call of starry cats that visit her in her dreams.

[Danielle]

Looking good! There are just a few things that need to be taken care of before she can be approved and ready for roleplay.
First of all, you haven't filled in the blank for birth moon, and that needs to be done. If you're having trouble with that just let me know, whether through a PM or any other method.
Also, in this roleplay, you can't create a cat in a position of power, including medicine cats and their apprentices. This means your cat would have to be promoted to medicine cat in character, after Clans have begun to form. Right now she's just a kittypet so the ranks don't apply to her yet.
One last thing, you seem to have gotten the appearance and personality sections mixed together so you just need to separate them and add a bit to the personality section, since it's quite small.
And that's it! Fix those up and I'll give it another check over to make sure everything is in order, and hopefully approve her for roleplay!

[Ruby]

I kind of got that (which is cool I like it) its more like "desired rank"

so DESIRED RANK: medicine cat (if everything works out at way yah know if not its in Starclan's paws)


Edited other stuff

[Danielle]

Ahh, alright. It's not guaranteed, but there's a good chance it could happen.
The appearance and personality sections of her sheet are still a bit lacking, so I need you to fill those in some more before she'll be approved. Also, the birth moon is correct for her age, but there's no year. Just add 2014 to it, so we can avoid any confusion.

[Danielle]

Accepted! I'll add her to the census and allegiances and you can go ahead and start roleplaying ^^