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Post by TimidLiLWolf on Aug 14, 2016 13:23:46 GMT
Name: Toturi
Age: 12 Moons
Allegiance: Loner
Birth Moon: Sturgeon Moon 2015
Gender: Queen
Appearance: Toturi is a narrow-shouldered, small, lithe and white queen with soft short fur. She has a narrow head and she has a torn ear from a fight. She has a long sleek tail and pale blue eyes.
Personality: Toturi is usually friendly to others, although she does prefer to be on her own but if ever she finds a place to call home and where she could be at peace she would most likely join them. She loves the freedom to do what she wants and will defend her freedom to do that to the end. She is open-minded though and will listen to others advice or help.She loves to listen to others stories about cats of old and often goes off to find these story tellers no matter where they are.
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Post by Danielle on Aug 14, 2016 21:18:20 GMT
Looks like you've got a good start! The only big issue I can see is her eye colour; cats need to have some form of white spotting or albinism in order to have blue eyes, so right now she's currently genetically impossible. You can either change her fur to make blue eyes possible, or make her eyes a different colour and keep her fur black.
You also said in her personality that she's a friendly cat, but also listed her as a rogue. You don't have to change this, but rogues are generally more aggressive towards other cats. It might be more fitting to call her a loner, but that's up to you since the descriptions are fairly vague. Expanding on her personality might be a good idea to flesh out her character a bit more.
In her personality, you referenced her not wanting to have a Clan since she prefers being on her own. That's fine, of course, but currently the Clans don't exist and most cats don't even believe they were real. Maybe give some insight as to how she knows about the Clans? Or you could change it so she doesn't know about them for now, and she simply prefers to travel alone. That's up to you ^^
Once you've fixed it up let me know and I'll give it another check over! If you need help fixing anything I've pointed out feel free to ask me for help c:
Edit: Everything looks great now! She's now approved, so I'll move her to the accepted bios board and add her to the census and allegiances. Feel free to start posting with her whenever you like!
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