Rusty

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Name: Rusty/Russetstar
Desired Name:
Age: 28 moons 
Rank: None
Birth Moon: Flower Moon 2014
Gender: Tom
Alliance: Loner
Appearance: Rusty is a russet coloured tom with medium length fur. His eyes are green. He is a large yet slender tom.
Personality: Rusty is a proud and ambitious young cat. He wants to rebuild ShadowClan and make it a legend! He is currently a loner gathering cats to join him, but he calls himself Russetstar.
History: Rusty's great great great great great grandmother was a survivor of the great battle. She was pregnant in the nursery, and fled to become a kittypet when she realized the Clans were destroyed. But she passed down the story to her offspring, and they passed it onto theirs. That's where our story begins.

Rusty was an ordinary kittypet. He spent his kithood pawing at the door that separated him from the wind, the trees, the sun. He had a tug - it pulled him to the outside. He begged his mother to go outside, and she relented.

But he lived in the middle of the city. Buildings surrounded him. But that changed when someone bought him. That person lived in the country.

Rusty then set out to create ShadowClan.

[Danielle]

( I'm assuming this is ready to be checked by the looks of it since there's no completed tag in the title, but if you're still working on it and I've checked it too early do let me know! )

His appearance, personality and history look great! There are just a few problems with his vitals that need to be fixed.
First of all, his birth moon is off, and also requires a year. It should be the Snow Moon, 2013, from the look of things.
Also, while he can definitely have knowledge of ShadowClan, and have aspirations to be part of it one day, he's currently not a member of ShadowClan since it doesn't exist. Since you stated in his personality section that he's a loner, it should also say so in his allegiance field. Once he becomes a Clan cat, it can be updated to show his new allegiance.

In his personality field you stated that he actively calls himself Russetstar, however his name field states that his name is Rusty. If he goes by both, just make sure to add Russetstar to the name field to show that both are names he uses. Also, the desired name field is used for warrior names with variable suffixes (ie. Thrushpelt vs Thrushnose), so leaders can give the names players want to their characters. It's not used for positions with only one suffix, such as kits, apprentices, and leaders. Make sure to put a warrior name in the desired name field if you have a specific name you want, or you can leave it blank and let the future leader decide, if it turns out he isn't leader himself.

And that leads into my last point, his rank. Although any cat can aspire to be a Clan leader, there are no guarantees every cat will have that opportunity. You can read this thread for more info on what goes into choosing a cat for high positions, rather than have me explain it all here. Since he's a loner, he has no Clan ranking and therefore can't be a leader at this point in time. This doesn't mean that he can't still call himself Russetstar if he chooses. If he has knowledge of the Clans and knows how their naming system works, this is fine since essentially it is just a name. He just won't have the nine lives or Clan that come with being a leader, since the Clans are still gone. Once they're remade, he'll likely have to lose the suffix -star if he ends up not being a leader, unless he remains a loner.

If you've got any questions about his bio or whatnot, feel free to PM me and I can help you figure it out! If not, just fix up the things I've mentioned and I'll check it over again.

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I think this is good!

[Danielle]

Yup, looks good to me! You can start posting with him whenever you like, and I'll add him to the census and allegiances!